I read your blurb under your presentation, admittedly did not watch your presentation. However I would say that your blurb comes off too much of an attack on robo advisors and not enough about your own company/approach and how you're different from every other active investor. I'd focus on why you're good, rather than on why the competition is bad.
We can't talk too much about why we are different given that a) we aren't SEC and NFA registered yet.
b) there are legal issues around saying you generate better returns than the competition.
We talk a little bit about why we are different in the video so give it a listen if you are interested.
I read your blurb under your presentation, admittedly did not watch your presentation. However I would say that your blurb comes off too much of an attack on robo advisors and not enough about your own company/approach and how you're different from every other active investor. I'd focus on why you're good, rather than on why the competition is bad.