My comments on social networks, insurance companies, and casinos sharing a similar business model strike a tone similar to a neural-network generated text? Is it the cavalier use of colloquial language? I often see "this looks like it was written by GPT-3" on HN, it seems like a trendy thing to place as a comment for writing styles one disapproves of.
I'll bite. I actually became disinterested partway through reading and closed to read some comments, so judge for yourself if you're at all interested in my pov :)
I'm also not a blogger myself, so my feelings won't be backed by
writer experience, I'm just replying to try and articulate my own
(subconscious) thought process when deciding that I don't want to read something anymore, in the hope that it can be somewhat helpful. I mean no disrespect.
I have to say I struggled through the analogy of
the coral reef. In
the end, once I understood what the analogy was visualizing, I came
away with the impression that it only detracted, instead of adding to, my understanding: I had the idea that I understood the situation with the reef because of my understanding of social networks, instead of the other way around. This gives, of course, a disjointed feeling.
I checked out when I started reading the section on Access and
Availability. The section started with another setting: that of a 4th
grader, and then moved to another setting, the gravity of
molecules. We've had a lot of settings now: casinos, insurance
companies, social networks, coral reefs, and now these two. That's a
lot to keep in mind. I just now saw that there is also the mention of
pizza dough as well!
That may be why commenters are relating this to gpt3: the narrative
jumps all over the place, never resting anywhere- just like the neural netwerk does!
I'm not saying you cant use all these settings in the text. But
sticking to a single analogy, at least in the opening segments, would
have brought a lot of clarity to this text. That way I as reader would also feel that you stay closer to your stated topic, which would make for more interest in reading your post.
There are other points to be made here, but I'll leave that to others.